2007年6月14日木曜日

Oranges


My hometown is Ehime in Shikoku. Ehime is famous for oranges because Ehime makes the most oranges in Japan.
My grandfather is a farmer. So he knows oranges very well. Today I got oranges by him. It was very small, cute one, but very sweet.

2 件のコメント:

Jason さんのコメント...

You need to work on combining your thoughts into more complex or concise sentences, rather than having many short sentences which are either weak or are fragments.

For example:

My grandfather is a farmer. So he knows oranges very well.


My grandfather is an orange farmer.


"So he knows oranges very well" is not a sentence. In my sentence I called him an orange farmer, which implies that he knows much about oranges. It is a more concise way to say the same thing.

ataru さんのコメント...

Thank you!!
I write more concise sentences.